The Approach: Craft Mechanics, Not Academic Fluff

Screenwriting coverage shouldn't read like an academic lecture.

When you are staring down a draft that isn't working, you don't need obscure film references, textbook jargon, or generic beat-sheet scores, you need to know where the script is leaking power and how to fix it.

As a produced feature film writer (Wait for Me, theatrical & streaming release), MA graduate, and major competition winner (BBC Writersroom, Red Planet Prize), I evaluate screenplays from the engine room up.

# My notes focus squarely on the problems working writers face.

# Narrative Momentum & Logic: Identifying structural dead ends, plotting holes, and sluggish pacing.

# Character Agency: Ensuring protagonists drive the action rather than passively reacting to circumstances.

# Dialogue & Subtext: Trimming exposition into distinct, speakable character voices.

# Production Viability: Assessing whether your story can realistically be produced within practical indie budget constraints.

Service Package Card

The "First Look" Script Diagnosis

Price: 85.00 flat fee

Turnaround: 5 to 7 working days

Designed for writers with early-to-mid stage drafts who need a clear, unvarnished diagnostic before embarking on their next rewrite.

What You Receive

A concise, structured 3 to 4 page PDF diagnostic report covering:

Premise & Structural Flow

Assessing hook strength and act-by-act narrative drive.

Story Mechanics & Logic Leaks: Diagnosing plot holes, arbitrary turns, and tension drop-offs.

Character Arcs & Motivation:

Clarifying core internal conflicts and relational dynamics.

Dialogue & Practical Production Viability:

Evaluating dialogue, budget realism, and staging efficiency.

Priority Action Plan:

The top three most impactful creative fixes to tackle in your next draft.

Accepts:

Feature Film Screenplays (up to 120 pages) or 60-minute TV Pilot Drafts (Standard industry formatting).